Example #1


        Finally they picked him up and took him to the vet. We were told that someone had fed him ground beef with broken glass in it which cause tearing in the large intestine and bleed to death. I was in a state of shock. My dad became indignant and wanted to find out who did it.That night around two o clock in the morning we woke to voices and noise. My dad came into my room because he wanted to see out from my bedroom window to view my neighbors house. He saw a group of people doing drugs and literaly minutes later the cops showed up. We don't know what happened that night but my parents and I are under the impression that my neighbor was maybe the one that feed Wilson the ground beef with glass in order to shut him up from barking.

Example #2

      Finally they picked him up and took him to the vet . We were told that someone had fed him ground beef with broken glass in it, and caused tearing in the large intestine and bleed to death. I was in a state  of shock. My dad became indignant; and wanted to find out who did it. That night around two o'clock in the morning, we woke up to voices and noise. My dad came into my room; because he wanted to see out from my bedroom window to view my neighbors house. He saw a group of people doing drugs and literally minutes later the cops showed up. We don't know what happened that night, but my parents and I are under the impression that my neighbor was, maybe the one that feed Wilson the ground beef with glass in order to shut him up from barking.

Part #2

   The idea in adjusting your tone is to engage your readers in what the story is about. It gives it more flavor verses just writing a plain sentence.


   The idea that expresses using image is when you dress or speak a certain way. It represents you as person, and that is the way people will come across .